Yarras Jiamal

[Bob aLanstin]

Let’s get the basics down first.

Name: Yarras Jiamal
Nicknames: Yar Har Har
Age: 30
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Homeworld: born in port royal, currently lives in traverse town
Alliance: Shadow

You’re just a puppet aren’t you?

Played By: Bob aLanstin
Age: 12
Gender: Male
Contact: See John
Audition Link: This is only if your character is canon.
Other: Anything else you want us to know? Optional.

Speech color: Gold

So tell me a little bit about yourself.

Physical Aspects: Yar is 5 ft tall and weighs 100 lbs. He is not very muscled, and therefore, he requires other people to protect him from attacks. He has golden eyes, like this. He has very short lavender hair. He wears a black robe that can shield him from view in the darkness and shadows.



Persona:

• Façade: It's obvious that Yar is obdurate, accepting no failure. You can tell that he has a dearth of honesty and respect. He seems to be self-obsessed, with no attention to others unless having a conversation, or it involves him someway. It is easy to tell that he contemplates for people to listen to him. He appears to lack in his pursuits, but if you look, you can tell because of his frail body. He appears to not get involved with fights.
  
  
• Inner Mind: You can tell that Yar is obdurate, accepting no failure. He has a dearth of honesty and respect. He is self-obsessed, paying no attention to others. He contemplates for people to listen to him. He is fierce in his pursuits, to the point that he exhausts his energy. He rejects battle unless it is necessary. He rejects helping anyone other than himself unless it somehow suits him.

Empty your pockets and show me what you got

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Stand up and fight.

Weapon(s): He has a staff called Krill it is the black one with the red orb.

ABILITIES SECTION:

Fire
Yar casts a fireball as big as a soccer ball. on an opponent.

Range: 80 ft.
Speed: 20 mph
Cooldown: 2
Uses: 8 times
Strength: Weak

Magical Enhancement
While touching his staff, Yar magical damage increases by 50%

Range:
Cooldown:
Uses: Passive
Strength: Weak

Cure
Yar cures a character for weak damage.

Range: Can cure person up to 30 ft away from Yar
Speed:
Cooldown: 3
Uses: 7
Strength: Weak

Everybody’s got a weakness or two; what are yours?

Elemental Weakness: Water
Other Weaknesses:

What’s your story?

Yar was born with a weaker body than most, but used that to gain magical powers. He eventually chose to follow the way of neutrality because he doesn't agree with the side of light or the side of darkness. He studied for a while and did what he could to gain magical power. When he was 18, he moved to Traverse Town to be away from his parents. When he was 27, he was caught in a struggle between light and darkness that nearly killed him. He would have died if he hadn't been saved by a nearby mage. He then made a decision with himself not to join the light or the darkness. He has then studied and trained his magical potential in case he was ever needed for mean comments and bad jokes.

He received his staff when he was leaving Port Royal. He discovered it in a trash bin. He figured no one needed it so he grabbed it and discovered it had magical powers so he took it home with him.

It all comes down to this: make your choice.

You are presented with three weapons: a sword, a staff, and a shield. The sword represents the power of the warrior; invincible courage comes with this weapon as well as horrible destruction. The staff represents the power of the mystic; inner strength comes with this weapon as well as wonder and ruin. The shield represents the power of the guardian; kindness to aid friends comes with this weapon as well as a shield that will repel all.

Which one will you choose?

Chosen Weapon: Staff


Energy Blast
Pointing your hand or weapon at an enemy, a ball of energy of a color of your choice flies in a straight line, headed towards one foe. This ball is about the size of a softball.

Range: 40 feet
Speed: 10 mph
Cooldown: 5 posts
Uses: 2 uses
Strength: Weak

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[Fate]

The amount of sentences you have for both sections of your Persona and your Physical Aspects barely meet the minimum and they're really choppy. If you could add some more substance to them, that'd be great. In your Persona section, I just felt like you were repeating a lot of stuff. Get deeper into your character and explore different parts of him.

As for your abilities, I just need the first one to be specific. Is it a ball of fire? A wall of fire? What is it? I can't really picture it at all. Other than that, your profile is fine.

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[Bob aLanstin]

better

[Fate]

While your sentence quantity improved for the persona sections, I didn't see much of an improvement for quality. The sentences are still rather choppy to me and they lack substance. I would think that there is more to this character than anger since that's all I see, but I suppose I'll let that slide and give this character some room to grow...

As for your abilities, I need to know how big the fireball is-- give me an estimate of sorts (big as a soccer ball or something is sort of what I'm looking for). For the cure ability, I want to know how much it cures; what you have there isn't very specific.

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[Bob aLanstin]

edited the persona bit

[Fate]

Unless anyone else has got a problem with this, I'll accept it; anyone else can unlock it and whatnot if they see any other issues I missed.

Accepted, Locked and Moved!

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